tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4014461870405318477.post4427303427375510662..comments2023-02-22T10:44:50.456-06:00Comments on mudjob: Bill LaphamMDJBhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17793388758122524855noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4014461870405318477.post-75072549770709433072012-04-14T21:46:46.349-05:002012-04-14T21:46:46.349-05:00This is an outstanding piece Bill- I'm inside ...This is an outstanding piece Bill- I'm inside Baker's head screaming to get out- I like the repetitive "when he woke" that really solidifies the horror of it all- also didn't think repeating smashed was bad at all-drove it home for me. Excellent.Paul de Denushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07340834218523341885noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4014461870405318477.post-35993622911872227492012-04-14T13:45:50.695-05:002012-04-14T13:45:50.695-05:00Seriously, if you don't send this off to major...Seriously, if you don't send this off to major magazines then I won't be your friend anymore. <br />I am not sure why I have the feeling that I have read parts of this before, though not the whole satisfying piece that's here.<br />So what'll it be? Send this off to editors or lose my friendship?Gita Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02883735348008779245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4014461870405318477.post-20433451927987724062012-04-14T12:07:16.727-05:002012-04-14T12:07:16.727-05:00I used the word 'smashed' twice in the sam...I used the word 'smashed' twice in the same sentence, the last one before the break. I know you noticed. I think that happens when I revise part of a sentence and not the WHOLE sentence. Lesson: Revise whole sentences. Ugh.Bill Laphamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05905581419025750995noreply@blogger.com